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This person he is very cool,I met him in freshmen year in math class while talking to another friend. Then we were talking and then next thing u know we were pretty close friends. We hanged out alot we went to each others house and stared playing hella videogames :D. Then its was his birthday and it was a balst...Dont know if we were supposed to right this?
What is the dude's name?
ReplyDeleteHis nombre is Christopher!
ReplyDeleteyou don't write HELLA in a sentence. It's not formal breh! Haha. Anyways, the first paragraph starts with your controlling impression; like the person you're talking about.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Myra- you want to make sure to have more of a formal tone in this narrative, which means leaving out the "hella"s and cleaning up your grammar. All of your anecdotes could use some more concrete sensory details, too: what happened at his birthday that made it such a blast?
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